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Re: Typos

Post by Astolfo » Sun May 28, 2017 10:05 am

Guards in Luguard, should be 'your'
Might just revisit the whole desc.

This member of the town's militia stands in a slumped stance, instead of
upright and at attention. He has given up on trying to maintain perfect law and
order, and has settled on trying to stop just the crimes he sees. He notices
you glance and returns it with a smirk before promptly turning away.

A member of the Lugard Command is in excellent condition.

a member of the Lugard Command is using:
<worn on head> a chain coif
<worn on body> a thick mail shirt
<wielded> a heavy club
<worn on legs> plain brown pants
<worn on feet> a pair of heavy leather boots

fixed at reboot.

Re: Typos

Post by Treach » Fri Apr 21, 2017 9:03 am

* HP:Battered MV:Fresh > l
Outside the Gate to Whitebridge
The forest stands just a short run from the small city walls of
Whitebridge. The small gate appears to head into the northern part of the
town proper and appears to be solely for use by hunters wishing to trap and
hunt in the dense and tangled woodland lurking to the north.
[ obvious exits: N S ]
A lantern has been left here. [2]
A chicken wanders around here, pecking at the ground.
|1|.A gray palfrey prances skittishly nearby.
An Andoran cavalryman is here, riding a |2|.roan charger.
An Andoran cavalryman is here, riding a |3|.roan charger.
An Andoran cavalryman is here, riding a |4|.roan charger.
An Andoran cavalryman is here, riding a |5|.roan charger.
An Andoran cavalry officer watches vigilantly, riding a |6|.warhorse.

* HP:Battered MV:Fresh > l andoran
Proud in his service to the Lion Throne this man is resilute in his service to
the Crown of Andor. Face weathered from weeks spent in the wilds defending his
homeland this man seems a steadfast warrior in the service of the Light.

A cavalry soldier is in excellent condition.

a cavalry soldier is using:
<worn on head> a chain coif
<worn about body> a cloak of the Andoran cavalry
<worn on hands> a pair of leather half-gauntlets
<worn on legs> a pair of chainmail leggings
<worn on feet> a pair of thin metal boots

Re: Typos

Post by Guest » Tue Apr 04, 2017 8:37 pm

After saying 'issue accepted quest' to Yukiri Sedai in the Gray Ajah quarters:

Yukiri Sedai says 'One of the Aes Sedai has been adivising the King of Illian in matters of state.'

Should be advising.

Re: Typos

Post by Bianca » Thu Mar 16, 2017 8:50 pm

* R HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Fresh > w
Tower Square
[ obvious exits: N E S W ]
An oil lamp, set in a steel cage, hangs from a high wooden pole.
A wild stallion bucks madly, being ridden by you.
A guardsman watches the streets for signs of trouble.
A woman goes about her daily business here.

* R HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Fresh > l woman
Carrying a basket with frehs groceries, this woman is clearly shopping for
her family. She is dressed in a finely woven dress and coat which bear no
embellishments. She is greeted by shopkeepers and other passersby alike,
suggesting she is a local.

A local woman is in excellent condition.

a local woman is using:
<worn on finger> a heavy gold signet ring
<worn about body> a blue silk dress sewn with pearls
<worn around wrist> a golden bracelet
<wielded> an ivory-hilted stiletto
<worn on legs> a pair of silken hose
<worn on feet> a pair of blue velvet slippers

Re: Typos

Post by Upson » Wed Mar 08, 2017 10:12 pm

Legion Zone

At a Tall Rock Face
This shady corner of the large, open field is bordered by a tall, slick
rock wall. A large boulder rests tightly against the wall. Creeping vines
have grown for many years up this side of this rock face, but are too think
and scraggly to offer any substantial foot hold for climbing.
[ obvious exits: S ]

think should be thin

A Silent Forest
The forest becomes very quiet here. You see an occasional bird fly
overhead, but the only sound that greets your ears is the whisper of wind
past its wings. Event the crunch of leaves under you boots seems muted.
[ obvious exits: N W ]

Event should be Even

Re: Typos

Post by Landon » Mon Jan 23, 2017 1:30 am

Cerys already said the lack of description was intended on Thuvia's post, but I'm getting a (null) description.

Mob: a dark, furtive figure

* R HP:Wounded MV:Full > l figure
A dark, furtive figure is in excellent condition.

a dark, furtive figure is using:
<worn on head> a wide-brimmed hat
<worn about body> a dark, hooded cloak
<worn on hands> a thin pair of soft boarskin gloves
<wielded> an ebony shortblade
<worn on legs> a black pair of pants
<worn on feet> a pair of light leather boots

Re: Typos

Post by Taziar » Fri Jan 20, 2017 10:23 pm

Stone Steps Before the King's Palace
These wide stone steps are not very high, but they are quite deep. Their
smooth surface runs across the entire length of the Square of Tammuz here
at the bottom, but towards the top they come together more narrowly. The
steps lead up to the King's Palace of Illian.
[ obvious exits: N E ]

Tammuz should be Tammaz

Illian King and Council hall zone, south west corner of square.

Stone Steps Leading to the Great Hall of the Council
A wide staircase sweeps up to the entrance of the Great Hall of the
Council. The steps grow wider as they get closer to the bottom and the
Great Square of Tammuz, creating a pyramid effect. There is an entrance
hall just east of here, through a set of large bronze double doors.
[ obvious exits: N E S W ]

Tammuz should be Tammaz

Same zone, east side of square at Council Hall entrance.

Re: Typos

Post by Marcellis » Thu Jan 19, 2017 2:09 pm

A handsome lady says 'The dresses worn by locals here mostly have a high collars and are frequently embroidered with floral motifs.'

Doing the child quest for Wall Guard the same mob as above speaks and the 'a' ought to be omitted.

Re: Typos

Post by Marcellis » Thu Jan 19, 2017 2:02 pm

In Far Madding at the Exchange house (bank):

Almost completely engrossed in the counting of the banks funds at hand,
this strikingly handsome lady keeps a close count on the books. Her auburn
hair, showing signs of silver, is pulled back neatly into a bun allowing
her an unobstructed view out of the corners of her eyes.

A handsome lady is in excellent condition.

a handsome lady is using:
<worn about body> a flowing white robe
<worn on feet> a pair of elegant leather slippers

banks should be bank's or if it's referring to many banks in town it could be banks'

Re: Typos

Post by Marcellis » Wed Jan 11, 2017 10:15 am

In Lugard, hardened man. Taraboner should be capitalized.

* R HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Full > l shifty
This man has a hard face riddled with scars. His brown eyes and hair mark him
as a taraboner. Above the traditional viel his eyes continually move about the
room. The look in them and the slight sneer on his face speak of a life filled
with violence.

A hardened man has a few scratches.

a hardened man is using:
<worn on head> a leather helmet
<worn on body> a dark red shirt
<wielded> a long, heavy knife
<worn about waist> a leather belt
<worn on legs> plain brown pants
<worn on feet> a pair of leather boots