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Re: Typos

Posted: Fri Dec 16, 2016 7:05 pm
by Thuvia
Mob: a vernarsh

As the vernash darts in and out of sight you can make out sharp, intelligent
eyes set behind its long muzzle. Standing about two feet high at the shoulder
it easily slips out of view, snapping at anything which may enter its hunting
grounds with devilish glee. Pausing for a second, it returns your stare calmly.

Not really sure which is misspelled, the mob's name or its description, but they don't match.

Re: Typos

Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2016 9:49 pm
by Thuvia
Mob: Lord Granlin

Though not that tall, this man is fat and round. But do not mistake him for
weak, for beneath his tubby exterior lies large slabs of muscle and a
suprising grace. Despite being out in the countryside, he is still wearing
a silk brocade jacket, as well as some other finery that looks a bit out of
place in his surroundings. He wears his red beard combed to a point, and
his red hair long and free flowing past his shoulders.

Re: Typos

Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2016 8:50 pm
by Thuvia
Mob: a sleek wolfhound

Large brown eyes above a slender black snout eye you with reserved
curiosity. Small ears perk up from its head, portraying the dog's emotions.
The dog's deep chest and rump are covered with shaggy hair that merges
its body from sharp thorns and twigs. Close to three feet tall,
its legs are long and thin but well muscled.

Something wrong with that flow there, maybe instead should be "merges and protects" or "merges to protect".

Re: Typos

Posted: Thu Dec 22, 2016 5:08 pm
by Thuvia
Zone: Mayene Peninsula

Around the City Wall
The city wall spans almost the entire width of the peninsula. Built not
only for defense purposes but also to keep the sometimes harsh wind outside
the city, the walls are polished smooth and glitters slightly in the sun.

The Mayene Road Through Highlands
Moist and warm air clings on to you and everything else, even the grass
appears to be sweating. Bugs and insects thrive here though, crawling and
flying all over the area in search for food. A few snakes makes the
vegetation rustle from time to time. The city of Mayene is easily spotted
at the south edge of the peninsula.

Re: Typos

Posted: Fri Dec 23, 2016 10:26 am
by Thuvia
Amador to Emond's Field coach:

Inside a Wooden Coach
The coach going between Amador and Emonds Field is a simple, yet functional
one. Simple brown curtains and seats made in leather make the interior seem
somewhat spartan. The windows have traces of mud and dirt on them from the
outside, and judging by how high up they can be found on the window, the
driver must be pushing his horses to the maximum of their strength.

The coach turns north, up the Old Road towards Emonds Field.

The coach has arrived at Emonds Field.

-Not sure if this is coding or not, and it may or may not also apply in the other direction, which I have not checked.

Re: Typos

Posted: Tue Dec 27, 2016 1:14 am
by Adael
* HP:Healthy MV:Tiring >
The Smiling Gleeman
Garish light thrown from colored screens around the lamps shine a shield
of unreality across the inside of the tavern, rivaling the festive
panels which cover the walls, providing an escape from the road for
those merchants and travelers rich enough to afford its wares. A hard
wooden floor surrounds a circular platform in the center of the room,
a stage for minstrels and other high class acts.
[ obvious exits: N U ]
Door down: Floorboards
An innkeeper makes his rounds of the room, tending to guests.
A bloodstock stallion has arrived from above.
A young Lion Warden soldier has arrived from above.

* HP:Healthy MV:Tiring >
l stage
Immediatly in the center of the room, this circular platform is no doubt
the center of attention for the room. A stool sits at the middle, the
resting place of whatever mistrel, dancer or even gleeman may have stopped
by on a given night.

Re: Typos

Posted: Tue Dec 27, 2016 1:17 am
by Adael
* HP:Healthy MV:Strong >
Gresvak Lane
The lane opens into a small dirt courtyard. To the south of the courtyard
stands a small, yet impressive building. A tall door of oak bars entry to
the building, but a plaque next to the door declares this building to be
a court of law.
[ obvious exits: E S ]
Door south: oakdoor
A bloodstock stallion has arrived from the east.
A young Lion Warden soldier has arrived from the east.

* HP:Healthy MV:Strong >
knock oakdoor

* HP:Healthy MV:Strong >

You knock on the oak door.

* HP:Healthy MV:Strong >

Someone peers through a hole in the oak door.

* HP:Healthy MV:Strong >

A voice from inside says 'One moment criminal Adael.'

* HP:Healthy MV:Strong >

You hear the door unlocking from the other side.
The oakdoor is opened from the other side

Missing a period at the end.

Re: Typos

Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2017 4:17 pm
by Adael
Adael wrote:3n e CCS

* HP:Healthy MV:Fresh >
l blacksmith
This tall, strong man works in the palace armory to serve one prupose. He
provides the armor designated to be worn by the Lion Warden who have
achieved status among their ranks. He will deal with no others.

The Lion Warden's smith has a few scratches.
The Lion Warden's smith is scratched.

Also, is there any way to have him drop things? He ate some new person's abs today because they gave receipt to the blacksmith instead of the armorer.

Ely edit: Fixed. He already has mobol to make him drop things - say drop it please.
The typo "prupose" in the first line still seems to not be fixed. And saying drop it please does not appear to make the blacksmith drop receipts/other things.

Edit: Log

* HP:Healthy MV:Full >
l blacksmith
This tall, strong man works in the palace armory to serve one prupose. He
provides the armor designated to be worn by the Lion Warden who have
achieved status among their ranks. He will deal with no others.

The Lion Warden's smith is in excellent condition.
The Lion Warden's smith is healthy.

* HP:Healthy MV:Fresh >
give fruit blacksmith
You give a strange fruit to the Lion Warden's smith.

* HP:Healthy MV:Fresh >
say drop it please
You say 'drop it please'

And he did nothing for a couple mins after that.

Re: Typos

Posted: Wed Jan 11, 2017 10:15 am
by Marcellis
In Lugard, hardened man. Taraboner should be capitalized.

* R HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Full > l shifty
This man has a hard face riddled with scars. His brown eyes and hair mark him
as a taraboner. Above the traditional viel his eyes continually move about the
room. The look in them and the slight sneer on his face speak of a life filled
with violence.

A hardened man has a few scratches.

a hardened man is using:
<worn on head> a leather helmet
<worn on body> a dark red shirt
<wielded> a long, heavy knife
<worn about waist> a leather belt
<worn on legs> plain brown pants
<worn on feet> a pair of leather boots

Re: Typos

Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2017 2:02 pm
by Marcellis
In Far Madding at the Exchange house (bank):

Almost completely engrossed in the counting of the banks funds at hand,
this strikingly handsome lady keeps a close count on the books. Her auburn
hair, showing signs of silver, is pulled back neatly into a bun allowing
her an unobstructed view out of the corners of her eyes.

A handsome lady is in excellent condition.

a handsome lady is using:
<worn about body> a flowing white robe
<worn on feet> a pair of elegant leather slippers

banks should be bank's or if it's referring to many banks in town it could be banks'